Looks a lot better. I like the eyebrow fix, and especially the change in the bottom of the shirt. The change on the right arm is nice, but that shading on it is a bit odd. I like what you were aiming for, but it looks weird to me right there. Maybe because the little light patch by the breast? Could be that it needs to be a lighter color like whats over the left elbow, or more likely its just the shape or existence of that little tiny light patch.

i like what you did with the shirt