I know for a fact I'm not the best storywriter to walk on the face of the earth, but here is one I'm doing for English 10. I need some input on it, and corrections you may see that need to be fixed, or punctuation problems.


Writing Exercise


It was a bright summer day; Ronald was having a typical day at work, chopping and stacking blocks of wood. Later that day, Ronald was confronted by a police officer. The police officer informed him that his wife was being charged with idiotic behavior in a public restaurant. A grin appeared on Ronald’s face. “What happened, what did she do?” Ronald asked, “She was being obnoxious in the restaurant, when asked to simmer down she started freaking out.” Said the Police Officer. Ronald’s grin turned into a frown, Ronald was now rather disappointed to hear this, as his day was going good up till then. Later that day when Ronald got off work, he started up his car and set off home. Upon arriving home he was greeted by his wife. “What were you thinking?” Ronald asked, “What do you mean?” Jolene asked, “I was confronted by a Police Officer at work today, he informed me that you were being obnoxious in a public restaurant.” Ronald proclaimed. “It wasn’t my fault, I ordered a meal and when it wasn’t on my table for 35 minutes I complained. When I complained they were saying I never even ordered yet, a cover up if you ask me. This got me frustrated, and I started throwing things around.” Jolene said. “That isn’t a good enough reason to throw things around. You should be bloody well happy you weren’t tossed in jail for your actions. But you’re still being charged.” Ronald proclaimed. “It wasn’t my fault, honest, Ronald.” Jolene said, “Then who’s was it? The police officer said they asked you to simmer down before you freaked out, is this true?” Ronald asked, “No, it’s not, Ronald. That was what one of the restaurant workers told the police officer, are you going to believe them before me?” Jolene asked. “I don’t know what to think, Jolene, I’m disappointed in your actions, why didn’t you be the mature one and get up and leave? Go find a different restaurant nonetheless.” Ronald said. “Think what you will – That doesn’t change the concept that my husband will believe a police officer, which was informed by a inconsiderate restaurant worker that pushed a customer to the point of disaster.” Jolene said. “Oh be quiet you, I was having a good day until I’m confronted by a police officer because my wife is having a spas out in a restaurant. I’m out of here.” Ronald said. Ronald put his coat on and went and started his car up, he set off to an unknown destination. After driving around for 45 minutes, Ronald pulled up at his brother Al’s house; he informed Al everything that happened today. “That doesn’t change the fact that she’s your wife, Ronald, why not show some sympathy? If you are made that she freaked out, have a civil conversation with her, and have her apologize the to restaurant owner. You getting mad and steaming out of the house isn’t helping no one.” Al said, “Maybe you’re right Al, maybe me getting mad is only making matters worse, I’ll be on my way now and see what I can accomplish by having a civil conversation with her about it.” Ronald said. Ronald walked outside and sat in his car, he put his car keys in the ignition, Ronald thought about things he could do to make matters better, and diminish the conflict between him and his wife. Ronald then started his car, and set off home. Upon arriving at home, Ronald was greeted by his wife outside “What possessed you to come home so early, Ronald?” Jolene said, “I was wanting to discuss this issue with you civilly, and see if we can solve it the right way. This is my main concern, I’m gone at work 12 hours a day, busting my butt for en’s meat, while you’re gone out eating in public restaurants, breaking materials they own, and getting charged. This disappoints me, I hope this is a lesson to you, and you learn from this experience. I never want to have this happen again, okay?” asked Ronald. “Alright, Ronald, I’m sorry for what happened, but I hate being taken for a fool. When some inconsiderate jerk tries to take advantage of one of his customers it sets me off.” Jolene said, “Didn’t you ever think they forgot about you? Maybe it was a minor problem on their side?” asked Ronald, “No, I never thought of that..” said Jolene, “Well next time think about that. Have you ever heard the phrase ‘Don’t jump to conclusions without knowing the facts’? Take that into consideration anytime you feel the fetish to spas out.” Said Ronald. “Alright Hun. I’m sorry. I’m sorry for any troubles this caused you. Sorry.” Said Jolene, “Apology accepted.” Said Ronald.
Later that night Ronald and Jolene sat around a fireplace discussing how their day went besides the whole restaurant issue. The next day was Jolene’s court case on the matter, she lost it and was fined a brim $50 to replace the materials she broke.
This was a lesson to her, and Ronald both, this shows you must think before doing, and know what you’re doing before doing it. Your actions result in some nearly life and death situations, and it’s your actions that must get you out of it. Think before using them.