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Well, I have an original game idea I'm working on and well... I want suggestions and comments mainly...

You are just an everyday teenage boy (or girl) with not a care in the world, but suddenly, strange events have been happening lately that change it all. People have been getting severely sick in your school after eating the school lunch and things have been disappearing at an alarming rate. The trees around the school are even starting to die. Most people think it was just a bad day, and the students have been told to bring their own lunches the next day, but you get a horrible feeling that this was far from being caused by ordinary reasons of bad school lunch and mischievous thieves. The next day, this thought is still on your mind and during your math class, screaming is heard all over the school. People start saying a black hole appeared in the gym and demons are jumping out and killing students. You know it is a stupid choice, but you go and try fight off the demons so others can escape, and you are about to be killed when a flash of light hits the demons and you are taken away to another world. In this world, you see two creatures in front of two portals, one black, and one white. You are then told what just happened and the creature in front of the black portal says it is too late to save your world, but it will save some of your friends and family, as well as give you power beyond what you have ever imagined if you serve him. The one in front of the light portal says there is still a slight chance to save your world and the others that are in trouble if you help him. The choice becomes yours.... You are then given a gem shard for the side you choose, which causes armor and a sword to form around you and then sent to find the remaining shards of your jewel and the shards of the elemental crystals of fire, air, water, and earth.

Worlds I plan to use so far besides the starting world, which is just an ordinary world like the real one we live in now (WILL be more for sure):
Worlds of the Elementals (original)
World of Light (original)
Void (aka World of Darkness [original])
Yu Yu Hakusho
Inuyasha
Sailor Moon
Blue Seed
Probably at least one Final Fantasy (more than likely FF8 or 9... POSSIBLY 7)

Gems and their shards:
Air=Swiftness, Wind, and Lightning
Water=Water, Healing, Ice
Earth=Strength, Nature, and Rock
Fire=Vitality, Fire, and Renewal
Light=Life, Day, and Spirit
Dark=Death, Night, Evil

Now... suggestions? comments? maybe if you are a coder you can help me. You see, I'm sort of unskilled and want to learn coding so I need someone to talk to whenever I have a problem... someone who doesn't mind being asked questions constantly... don't need that help right now, but I probably will soon.
The story seems kind of rushed, like why would the world begin being destroyed in a school? Oh, and doesn't the black demon defeat the purpouse of playing by saying the world will be destroyed, because if so, then whats the point of joining him? The world will be gone, and all thats left are your friends and family, so what would you use your powers for?


<<>>Kusanagi<<>>
In response to Kusanagi
I'm still trying to work that particular bug out with the black demon, that is only a rough draft of the story, but I'm thinking about it. Point is, I'll SOMEHOW give the choice between good and evil, as for this begining at a school. I guess I should think of something for that, like the school being on top of an entrance to underground ruins that holds some kind of power. Don't know, have any suggestions?
In response to Blueseed15
sounds like the plot to Doom with schoolkids instead of marines....
In response to Da_Rushyo
Umm... I know what Doom is because I play it a lot, but besides the part about there being demons... but besides that...
In response to Blueseed15
that spawn through a portal leading to another place.... aside from that......
In response to Da_Rushyo
Oh... you mean that wall with the huge demon head that has a big portal on its forehead...
In response to Blueseed15
Got Final Doom? Read the help thingy, it explains all.
In response to Da_Rushyo
Never read the help things for Doom, I just liked shooting the damn things... guess I'll install it again and take a look sometime... well, anyways, I'm probably going to change the storyline a bit somehow, make it make more sense, but just thought I would like to give everyone an idea what my plans were and see if anyone would be willing to help me code once I get the icons I have some people working on.
In response to Blueseed15
Bumping up so I can get suggestions about how to make joining evil work better and maybe finding someone to help me code.
In response to Blueseed15
Since I'm almost wrapped up with my current job, check this link for a rough description of my service.
In response to Hazman
Two things, one, looks like the things you help with aren't things I'm going to have in my game. Two, don't want someone to exactly do stuff FOR me, I want someone to tell me how to do certain things and explain how it works exactly...
Sounds like a Goosebumps episode.
In response to Sariat
I'm guessing that is kind of a bad thing... to me Goosebumps is just weird and not scary... not sure about anybody else... but I can say this much, there has only been two things on TV/Movies that have truly scared me... Thirteen Ghosts and Pee Wee Herman's Big Adventure...