literature(story idea)

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Jan 21 2015, 6:48 am (Edited on Jan 30 2015, 7:05 pm)
This is part of one of my story ideas from the past summer. I mention on my journal/journey post that i wanted to post one, so here it is. Tell me if you like or if you do not why you hate it. have a nice day. Pardon my grammar or any mistakes you see, its just a draft after all.

Humans had to leave their home world long ago; to escape nuclear devastation. They found shelter and lived life on another inhabited planet. 15 years later haunted by the stories of greatness from his old world a young guy got a crew together to return to their home planet. As soon as they entered space, they are welcomed by a barrage of weapon fire.They eventually evade them and jump to the system said to hold their original planet. They land on the planet walk up to a cliff and see.......


after note: If you read all of this I wanted to tell you that this idea came from a dream I had. It included actors also. My brother makes fun of me when my dreams seem long. XD
Jan 21 2015, 7:28 am
Pradon my grammer. Its just an draft after all. To escaper. The found selter an. On an other in habbited.

I don't have enough time to continue, sorry.
Jan 21 2015, 9:47 am
I have a lot of long and very realistic dreams. I don't think it's weird.

Also, English isn't your first language, is it?
Jan 23 2015, 4:44 pm
In response to Fugsnarf
Fugsnarf wrote:
Also, English isn't your first language, is it?

I hope not.
Jan 30 2015, 7:11 pm
In response to Fugsnarf
Fugsnarf wrote:
I have a lot of long and very realistic dreams. I don't think it's weird.

Glad to see I am not the only one.

Also, English isn't your first language, is it?

English is my first language. I know I have issues with the way I write. Mostly because I grew up in an environment where the way you talk isn't corrected. I wont get in to that any further.
Jan 30 2015, 7:13 pm
In response to Xirre
@Xirre it is sorry, i know learn enish ghood.
Jan 30 2015, 8:39 pm
In response to JabsPerson
JabsPerson wrote:
Fugsnarf wrote:
I have a lot of long and very realistic dreams. I don't think it's weird.

Glad to see I am not the only one.

Also, English isn't your first language, is it?

English is my first language. I know I have issues with the way I write. Mostly because I grew up in an environment where the way you talk isn't corrected. I wont get in to that any further.

That's pretty sad. Honestly, it hurts me to hear that. In my family proper grammar is a priority. But, that's not what exactly led me to learn the correct way to speak and write. I picked up a lot of the correct English grammar from roleplaying since rewards also counted proper grammar and creativity. It's always good to have a few people around you correct you so you can learn from your mistakes. Provided you don't bash them when they do. In time, it comes.