I see aliens all the time. Mostly on construction sites and Taco Bells.

~Kujila

If you have a few hours to spare (keep in mind, I'm a slow reader =P ) this story might interest you. =)

p.s. For everyone who has seen it, please don't spoil it for people who haven't. =P

Oh man. Thanks for the notice. I am on the second page and I either have the idea that one of those scary faces are going to pop up with a scary sound after clicking one of the links, or, something scary happens. Either way, I will read it tomorrow. I really do not want to be frightened at this current moment in time.

Yeh. California's main population is from somewhere far beyond the reach of Crispy...

holy [poo], im on the 9'th page of this thing and im almost afraid to move. this is scary.

Hee, that's actually pretty clever. :P

I'm trying to put this in a way that avoids spoilering... but the very thing at the end that makes it so effectively creepy is also what proves it to be a made up scare story, rather than an account of actual events.

Still, it's very well done.

It is obvious it was made up. I could tell just by reading the introduction.

I'm sorry, I didn't realize this was a contest... if that's the case, then I should tell you I was sure it was bull before I read the introduction.

Yeah, the beginning weakens the impact... it's cheesier than the actual content by far, and by overexplaining the lack of corraboratable details, he only draws attention to them.

Still, what I said was that the ending proves it, in a way that no amount of cheesiness and lack of detail can.

After the last entry, where you're told that the three went back to the cave to confront whatever was in there, you click on the link for the next installment and get a page not found... the dreadful implication being that they never made it back. If you get that far after having read all the way through the build up, it's actually a pretty effective scare... but the problem is, he wouldn't have put a "Next" link at the bottom of the page before he had a next page for it to go to, not just for the hell of it. :P

So as I said, the very thing that provides the spine-tingly goodness at the end is the thing that proves it's (enjoyable) fiction and not the true account it's presented as.

YMIHere wrote:

If you have a few hours to spare (keep in mind, I'm a slow reader =P ) this story might interest you. =)

p.s. For everyone who has seen it, please don't spoil it for people who haven't. =P

I just finished page 9, AND [bleep]! This [bleep] is [bleep]ing SCARY! My own adrenaline was pumping just from reading it! So much stress and tention, you're thinking "GET THE [bleep] OUT OF THERE!!"

I have some rational ideas that might explain and de-scarify the whole page 9, but that'd completely ruin the scaryness.


....Do I dare go to the next page?

It still scared the hell out of me, reading at night is not a good idea :/

Its not real, its ment to scare you. It scared me :/