rete if you will, not like i could put it into any songs. lol
(and yes, i know it's kinda violent. but such is the fate of all metal)
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Name: The Demon's Will
(part 1)
In a land filled with nothing but hate and sorrow
The Demon will rise again
In a land where Demon's are hated
The Demon will return
The Demon has many desires
He brings chaos and uncertainty to those who follow
If you try to stop him, nothing is ensuring your safety
The Demon's Will is to eliminate all life
To destroy all life and recreate it for his own world
The Demon's Will isn't to help any life
It's to wreck havoc and bring chaos to all that oppose him
(part 2)
When the brave soldiers tried to battle the Demon
It ended brutally
When the Demon was victorious, the apolocylpse was near
There isnt much time...
The Demon has many desires
He brings chaos and uncertainty to those who follow
If you try to stop him, nothing is ensuring your safety
The Demon's Will is to eliminate all life
To destroy all life and recreate it for his own world
The Demon's Will isn't to help any life
It's to wreck havoc and bring chaos to all that oppose him
(last part)
Once again he tries to destroy all life
Yet this time his will is broken
The Demon has many desires
He brings chaos and destruction to anything in his path
If you attempt to stop him, you'll die
The Demon's Will is to destroy all life
To bring an end to everything in existance
The Demon's Will is to break everything apart
To make sure nothing is in tact.
Someday, the Demon will be stopped
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 May 23 2008, 1:30 pm
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May 23 2008, 1:37 pm
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Popisfizzy
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That's, like, Spinal Tap-heavy, man. Dude, when anyone plays that they should crank it up to eleven.
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This is meaningless. It has no rhythm, at least none that I can detect.
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It's hard to read when you have so many tense-shifts in there.
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No! No! NO!
Any good metal song has two have at least one solo, preferably three. I *suppose* you could put them between "parts". But a really good song should be built around the kick donkey solos. You don't ever mention loss of sanity, which seems a natural fit for a song about the Demon. Also, references to the Dark Lord, fallen angels, and oblique HP Lovecraft references are all okay. Also, the song seems kind of short. I suppose some galloping guitar riffs and drum work could shore that up. Here is what I would suggest: Intro Guitar Solo 1 Intro Guitar Solo 2 Verse 1 Chorus Bridge- Guitar Solo Verse 2 (transitional mid verse mini-solo) Chorus Interlude Drum Solo 1 Verse 3 Chorus Drum Solo 2 Chorus Chorus Outro Guitar Solo I assume you pictured this more Iron Maiden vocals than Cannibal Corpse, right? | |